MY POEM REVIEWED BY RAJ KISHORE PATNAIK., HONOURABLE REVIEWER OF ODISHA.
HUMBLED AND HONOURED.
ON ITS WAY!
Looking at the world through your eyes
Everything looks pretty
Everything that passed seems to close to you
Like the pictures of yours stick to my heart
Like moon clings to the stars
Or ,you will never get rid of me
Me and my shadow
We are closer than hearts that stick in a soul
When your dreams fall apart
When each passing day
And life gets more exciting
And love is either in your heart
Or in its way.
Dr.Prasana Kumar Dalai@India.
Date.Friday,24 Nov 2023.
Dr. Prasana Kumar Dalai,
Congratulations on your recent poem, “On Its Way!” Your verses weave a tapestry of emotions, painting a vivid picture of the world through the lens of love and introspection. In this expansive poem, you invite readers to see the beauty in the ordinary, to perceive the world as a place of enchantment when viewed through the eyes of someone deeply cherished.
Your opening lines, “Looking at the world through your eyes, Everything looks pretty,” immediately draw readers into a realm where perception is colored by the magic of connection. The choice of “pretty” is simple yet profound, suggesting a transformative power in love, capable of turning the mundane into something extraordinary.
The imagery of memories clinging like pictures to the heart is both tender and poignant. It resonates with the universal experience of cherishing moments and holding onto them as if they were captured in a photograph. The comparison of this attachment to the moon clinging to the stars adds a celestial dimension, elevating the theme of love to something timeless and cosmic.
The line “Or, you will never get rid of me, Me and my shadow” introduces an intriguing duality. It speaks to the inseparability of two individuals, emphasizing a connection that transcends physical presence. The metaphor of the shadow, a constant companion, suggests a bond that withstands the test of time and challenges, a relationship that lingers even in the absence of direct light.
The phrase “closer than hearts that stick in a soul” is a poetic marvel. It encapsulates the profound intimacy between two souls, suggesting a connection that goes beyond mere proximity. The choice of words is exquisite, evoking a sense of unity that surpasses the physical and dives deep into the metaphysical.
As the poem progresses, you skillfully navigate through the complexities of life. The lines “When your dreams fall apart, When each passing day, And life gets more exciting” capture the ebb and flow of human experience. The acknowledgment of dreams unraveling adds a touch of realism, a recognition that life is not always a smooth journey. Yet, amidst the challenges, you introduce the idea that life becomes more exciting, hinting at the resilience of the human spirit and the potential for growth in adversity.
The culmination of the poem with the lines “And love is either in your heart, Or in its way” is a masterstroke. It encapsulates the essence of the entire piece, emphasizing the inevitability and power of love. The dual nature of love, as something already present in the heart or as an entity on its way, speaks to the continuous journey of discovery and rediscovery in relationships. It leaves the reader with a sense of anticipation, echoing the sentiment that love is a force constantly shaping and reshaping our lives.
In terms of style, your use of metaphors and similes adds a layer of richness to the poem. The comparisons to the moon, stars, and shadow create a sensory experience for the reader, allowing them to feel the emotions conveyed in the verses. The flow of the poem is seamless, with each stanza building upon the emotions of the previous one, creating a harmonious progression.
The poem’s universal themes of love, connection, and the evolving nature of relationships make it relatable to a wide audience. Your ability to capture the complexities of human emotions in a lyrical and accessible manner is commendable.
In conclusion, “On Its Way!” is a captivating exploration of love and life, showcasing your prowess as a poet. The depth of emotion, coupled with the elegant use of language and imagery, makes this poem a standout piece in the realm of English literature. Congratulations on creating a work that not only resonates with the heart but also lingers in the mind, inviting readers to reflect on the profound beauty found in the journey of love.
Warm regards,
RAJ KISHOR PATTNAIK
Felicitated by Honorable minister of information and Broadcasting,Sri Pritiranjan Ghadai, Honourable MLA of Kabisurjya Smt Latika Pradhan, Honourable MLA of Bershmpur Sri Bikram Panda above all Honourable M P Smt Pramila Bishoyee.
HUMBLED AND HONOURED.
REASON OF TEARS !
You are losing your trust on me
But you can never forget me
I don’t know why I’m certain
You won’t be able to mar my life
Whenever you turn the pages
Everything ‘ll remind you of me
In both pain and pleasure
You ‘ll find me pining for you
Wherever you go , a new spark awaits
Even if you try to extinguish it
You can’t find the reason of your tears.
©®Dr.Prasana Kumar Dalai@India
MY POEM REVIEWED BY RAJ KISHORE PATNAIK.
HUMBLED AND HONOURED.
LOST WORDS !
My eyes do tell an untold tale
A bit nostalgic, fading memories
That used to flow in small streams
No matter whether one listens or not
She used to talk ,things familiar to me
Like writing passages and reciting lines
It ended as my tears stopped rolling
A better time would dawn in my life
The lost words would reverberate
Again in my untamed lips sometime.
©®Dr.Prasana Kumar Dalai@India.
Date.Monday,20 Nov 2023.
Dear Dr. Prasana Kumar Dalai,
Heartfelt congratulations on your recent poem, “Lost Words!” Your poetic prowess shines through as you intricately weave the tapestry of emotions and memories, creating a resonant and evocative piece.
In “Lost Words,” your skillful use of language paints a vivid picture of nostalgia and fading memories. The opening lines, “My eyes do tell an untold tale,” immediately draw the reader into the emotional landscape you’re about to explore. The choice of words, such as “untold tale” and “fading memories,” sets a melancholic tone, inviting readers to delve into the depths of the narrator’s experiences.
The metaphor of memories flowing like small streams adds a beautiful layer to your poem. It captures the transient nature of memories, how they once flowed effortlessly, much like a gentle stream. The contrast between the past and the present is palpable, and readers can almost feel the weight of time passing.
The line, “No matter whether one listens or not,” introduces an element of solitude, emphasizing the personal nature of these memories. It’s as if the narrator is reflecting on moments shared with someone who may no longer be present, yet the memories persist.
The inclusion of a female presence who used to talk about things familiar to the narrator adds depth and a sense of intimacy. The act of “writing passages and reciting lines” conjures images of shared creativity and intellectual connection. The use of the past tense signals a shift, hinting at a loss or an end to this meaningful exchange.
The emotional crescendo reaches its peak with the line, “It ended as my tears stopped rolling.” This moment of vulnerability is powerfully expressed, conveying the emotional toll of whatever separation or change occurred. It leaves the reader with a profound sense of loss and longing.
Your optimistic note, “A better time would dawn in my life,” introduces a glimmer of hope, suggesting resilience in the face of adversity. The anticipation of a brighter future creates a dynamic tension within the poem, leaving the reader eager to witness the narrator’s journey toward healing and renewal.
The phrase, “The lost words would reverberate again in my untamed lips sometime,” serves as a poignant conclusion. It implies that though the words may be lost for now, there is a possibility of rediscovery. The use of “untamed lips” adds a touch of wildness, hinting at the untamed potential for expression that lies within.
In terms of structure, the poem flows seamlessly from one stanza to the next, creating a cohesive narrative. The pacing allows readers to absorb each emotion and reflection without feeling rushed. The simplicity of language enhances the accessibility of the poem, making it relatable to a broad audience.
Your mastery of poetic devices, such as metaphor and imagery, elevates the poem to a profound level. The metaphors of flowing streams and untamed lips add layers of meaning, inviting readers to engage in a thoughtful exploration of the themes presented.
In conclusion, “Lost Words” is a masterfully crafted poem that speaks to the universal human experience of loss, nostalgia, and the resilience of hope. Your ability to convey complex emotions with simplicity and grace is commendable. The poem’s resonance lingers, prompting readers to reflect on their own encounters with lost words and the possibility of rediscovery.
Once again, congratulations on this exceptional piece, and may your future endeavors in the realm of poetry continue to captivate and inspire.
Warm regards,
RAJ KISHOR PATTNAIK
Collaboration #173 Presented by Dr. Prasana Kumar Dalai INDIA and Kristy Ann Raines United States of America.
LOST WORDS !
My eyes do tell an untold tale
A bit nostalgic, fadding memories
That used to flow in small streams
No matter whether one listens or not
She used to talk ,things familiar to me
Like writing passages and reciting lines
It ended as my tears stopped rolling
A better time would dawn in my life
The lost words would reverberate
Again in my untamed lips sometime.
©®Dr.Prasana Kumar Dalai@India.
Date.Sunday,19 Nov 2023.
She will never for get him…
LOST LOVE!
I see in your eyes the many faded memories
of love that used to rush like the force of a
a rushing river without ceasing between us
Our talks were exciting and our interests
were so similar, as if we were one person
Then the day came when words became silence
and tears told the world our painful tale
At times I think that you will find the beautiful
lines of the never ending love story once again
Even now, I remember the words you once spoke,
and swear at times you want to speak them again
Yes, those lost words that you still refuse to say to me
sit on tip of your tongue… But you will not utter them.
But I refuse to forget… Speak them once more… <3
©®KristyRaines@USA
November 19, 2023
LOST WORDS !
My eyes do tell an untold tale
A bit nostalgic, fadding memories
That used to flow in small streams
No matter whether one listens or not
She used to talk ,things familiar to me
Like writing passages and reciting lines
It ended as my tears stopped rolling
A better time would dawn in my life
The lost words would reverberate
Again in my untamed lips sometime.
©®Dr.Prasana Kumar Dalai@India.
Date.Sunday,19 2023.
ALL I HAVE TO TELL
My heart has gone crazy too
No longer can listen any consolation
Heart doesn’t hold back even if I ask
You’re in my breaths and emotions
Everyone but you has felt my pulse
Those expressions I spoke of you
Can’t show how my heart throbs
Visible to everyone though you can’t
This is all I have to tell you today
Wrapped in ,I ‘ll touch you and pass
Stop me and I ‘ll stay at your feet.
©®Dr.Prasana Kumar Dalai@India.
Date.Friday ,17 Nov 2023.
MY POEM REVIEWED BY PROF Dr Nirakar Das
Sir, Department of English Asam University.
Humbled and Honoured.
Dr.Prasana Kumar Dalai.: The poem “ALL I HAVE TO TELL” by Dr Prasanna Kumar Dalai,a poet of eminence, pours out the intense feelings of the poet for his lady -love.The first line of the poem, ” My heart has grown crazy too” presupposes his mind having been upset owing to the nonchalant attitude of the sweetheart.Such a state of mind has hit hard the central part of his being.Impervious to any sort of consolation, the lover can’t hold back his unruly tears .His voice is that of a disgruntled person when he says that everybody excepting her realises his feelings and emotions.”You are in my breaths and emotions” attest the feeling that he can’t stand separation from her.All words possible on his part fall short to express his mind.Although everybody can visualise the lover’s madness , the sweetheart can’t.The concluding two lines:”Wrapped in, I will touch you and pass/Stop me and I will stop at your feet” boil down to a little ego and inhibition evinced by the love expecting the sweetheart to bend a bit. A molecule of hints from her side will definitely make him genuflect.Congratulations deare Sir for composing such a nice poem.Due respects.
Biography of the Author.
DrPrasana Kumar Dalai
(DOB 07/06/1973) is a passionate Indian Author-cum-poet while a tremendous lecturer of English by profession in the Ganjam district of Odisha.He is an accomplished source of inspiration for young generation of India .His free verse on Romantic and melancholic poems appreciated by everyone. He belongs to a small typical village Nandiagada of Ganjam District,the state of Odisha.After schooling he studied intermediate and Graduated In Kabisurjya Baladev vigyan Mahavidyalaya then M A in English from Berhampur University PhD in language and literature and D.litt from Colombian poetic house from South America.He promotes his specific writings around the world literature and trades with multiple stems that are related to current issues based on his observation and experiences that needs urgent attention.He is an award winning writer who has achieved various laurels from the circle of writing worldwide.His free verse poems not only inspires young readers but also the ready of current time.His poetic symbol is right now inspiring others, some of which are appreciated by laurels of India and across the world. Many of his poems been translated in different Indian languages and got global appreciation. Lots of well wishes for his upcoming writtings and success in future.He is an award winning poet author of many best seller books.Recently he is awarded Rabindra nath Tagore and Gujarat Sahitya Academy for the year 2022 from Motivational Strips . A gold medal from world union of poets France & winner Of Rahim Karims world literary prize 2023.The government of Odisha Higher Education Department appointed him
as a president to Governing body of Padmashree Dr Ghanashyam Mishra Sanskrit Degree College, Kabisurjyanagar.Winner of ” HYPERPOEM ” GUNIESS WORLD RECORD 2023.
MY POEM REVIEWED BY PROF Dr Nirakar Dash Sir , Humbled and Honoured.
BONDING BEYOND BIRTHS !
Do tell me something of the moon
That glitters in the sky shading light
Oh Moon! Me the lover of your enigma
Today you look like a princess of oasis
Whose portrait gives spectacular spell
How throbbing would be in her touch
I feel like having her by me all my way
Bonding beyond births and deaths
If I earn some virtues in her company
Life ‘ll be filled with tremendous glory
You’re my end and the last destination
I can live and die for none but you.
©©Dr.Prasana Kumar Dalai @India.
Date.Monday,13 Nov 2023.
Reviewed by Prof Dr Nirakar Das , Department of English of Department of English.Asam University.
Dr.Prasana Kumar Dalai.: The poet being a level -headed lover,asks his beloved to speak of love in general and of her love in particular.The enigma weaving poet,as many poets usually are, is desirous of diving deep into the enigma of love and of his fiancee as well.Likening the love to a princess of oasis with breathtaking magical spell voch for the difficulty involved as regards her attanability.The physical ideation expressed by the word “throbbing”is corroborated by “bonding beyond birth and death”-here death standing for Renaissance orgasm.The concept of sexuality and value based love go side by side.The poem”Bonding Beyond Birth and Death” is a tremendous journey from sex to superconsciousness deserving wide acclaim.Congraculations and regards Dr Prasanna Sir for composing such a poem unpacking of which makes it a must read!
