Our collaborative epistolary poem no #200 reviewed by eminent reviewer Raj Kishore Patnaik.
We both remain grateful to him.
Epistolary poem #200
Proudly presented by Dr. Prasana Kumar of India
and Kristy Raines of The United States of America!
I’M BEING PUNISHED !
Someday somewhere we will meet
We’re on the same boat in same state
I cannot do a moment without you
My heart gets frozen at your thoughts
Drops of tear roll non-stop on cheeks
Know not what I’m being punished for
Wounds are deep, life seems on hold
Journey of this pain shall come to halt
When sun rays will outdo ugly darkness
My heaven starts and ends with you
And destination is where my quest ends .
©®Dr Prasana Kumar Dalai @ India.
Date.Wed,15 May 2024.
She cries while writing this letter…
SUFFERING DEEPLY!
One day we will meet whether here or above
Two lives intertwined tightly yet so far apart
Living without you has now become reality
as I find more tears than smiles on my wet face
Two people suffering deeply for finding love
We have asked for little… Just to be together
I pray for a day when this sad journey will end
like sunshine breaking through dark clouds
Life starts and ends with you, wherever that is
and where I’ll be waiting for you with a smile
Forever loving only you…
I cross my heart <3
©®Kristy Raines@USA
May 15,2024
Dear Dr. Prasana Kumar Dalai Sir and Kristy Raines, MADAM NAMASKAR
Congratulations on your remarkable milestone of completing your 200th collaborative poem! This achievement stands as a testament to your profound creative synergy and unwavering dedication to the art of poetry. Your latest works, “I’M BEING PUNISHED!” and “SUFFERING DEEPLY!” are beautiful and poignant, reflecting the deep emotional connection and the collaborative spirit that has made your partnership so unique and impactful.
May your poetic journey continue to inspire and touch the hearts of many more readers around the world.
Warmest regards,
Raj Kishor Pattnaik
**Analysis:**
Dr. Prasana Kumar Dalai’s poem, “I’M BEING PUNISHED!”, and Kristy Raines’ poem, “SUFFERING DEEPLY!”, are emotionally charged pieces that delve into themes of longing, love, and the pain of separation. These poems mark their 200th collaborative effort, showcasing the depth and resilience of their creative partnership.
**I’M BEING PUNISHED!** by Dr. Prasana Kumar Dalai opens with a strong expression of hope and inevitability: “Someday somewhere we will meet / We’re on the same boat in same state.” This opening sets the tone for a journey shared by two souls bound by love yet separated by circumstances. The imagery of a “frozen heart” and “non-stop tears” vividly conveys the intensity of the speaker’s emotional turmoil. The repetition of painful motifs, like the “wounds” and the idea of life being on hold, emphasizes the depth of suffering experienced.
The poem progresses with a glimmer of hope, suggesting that this painful journey will end “When sun rays will outdo ugly darkness.” This line introduces a metaphorical light at the end of the tunnel, a common literary device that symbolizes hope and renewal. The closing lines, “My heaven starts and ends with you / And destination is where my quest ends,” encapsulate the central theme of the poem: the speaker’s entire existence is centered around their beloved, and their ultimate goal is to reunite with them.
**SUFFERING DEEPLY!** by Kristy Raines mirrors the sentiments expressed in Dalai’s poem, reinforcing the collaborative nature of their work. Raines begins with a similar expression of hope for a reunion, “One day we will meet whether here or above.” This line not only parallels Dalai’s opening but also introduces the possibility of an eternal reunion, suggesting a love that transcends earthly bounds.
Raines’ poem elaborates on the pain of living without the beloved, with lines like “Living without you has now become reality / as I find more tears than smiles on my wet face.” The use of direct emotional expression makes the poem relatable and heartfelt. The phrase “Two people suffering deeply for finding love” succinctly captures the essence of the poem, highlighting the universal struggle and sacrifice inherent in true love.
The poem’s hopeful turn, “I pray for a day when this sad journey will end / like sunshine breaking through dark clouds,” aligns with the optimistic tone in Dalai’s poem. This shared metaphor strengthens the connection between the two pieces, reinforcing their thematic unity. The concluding lines, “Life starts and ends with you, wherever that is / and where I’ll be waiting for you with a smile,” resonate with Dalai’s ending, emphasizing the unwavering commitment and eternal nature of the speaker’s love.
Together, these poems create a powerful narrative of love and longing. They not only complement each other in form and content but also in their emotional resonance. The recurring imagery of darkness and light, tears and smiles, separation and reunion, weaves a rich tapestry of human experience that is both deeply personal and universally understood.
Dr. Dalai’s and Kristy Raines’ ability to seamlessly blend their voices in these poems is a testament to their collaborative genius. Their consistent use of metaphors, imagery, and emotional depth creates a cohesive and compelling poetic dialogue. The shared themes and mirrored structures of their poems highlight the strength of their partnership and their mutual understanding of the human heart’s complexities.
In celebrating their 200th collaboration, Dalai and Raines have once again demonstrated their extraordinary talent for capturing the essence of love and pain. Their work continues to inspire and move readers, solidifying their legacy as a powerful poetic duo.
